Closed Poem #8

[MisterSenpai]

"Scar"




DONE? you can never tell when it's done
All of these things happening in our life
Each and everyday we do multiple lies
Multiple mistakes and creating unexpected signs

How do we know when it's realy done?
Struggles are never be done and never be gone
Problems are definitely infinity
It will never ends until it solved

How do you mange to solve your life?
In this cruel world were standing for?
Do you think the word "DONE" realy exist?
There is no DONE will exist in our life

There's a lot of things never accepts this kind of word
Our life never ends when we died
Literaly, we died and it becomes an end of journey
But still, our sould and mind, our love never be gone empty

There is always love, even our body dies
There is no point to believe in this word DONE
There is no DONE will end our life for none
You must wrong if you believe theres a word DONE

No matter what happened, even if I died
My love is still continuesly loving
Theres no rule to stop, there is no word DONE
Likewise when we I got a SCAR




"There is no word of DONE in my life..
I'll make an endless way until I reached what I want"




cutemedievil
-Ateh-
madogou
baguling
Lightrash

 

[cutemedievil]

I will correct you later. I'm at a convention right now.
You don't have any grammatical error on the first stanza. WOW! Nor any misspelled words. I'm proud

 

[Lightrash]

I will correct you later. I'm at a convention right now.
You don't have any grammatical error on the first stanza. WOW! Nor any misspelled words. I'm proud

any pancakes left?

 

[Lightrash]

DONE? you can never tell when it's done
All of these things happening in our life
Each and everyday we do multiple lies
Multiple mistakes and creating unexpected signs

How do we know when it's really done?
Struggles are never be done and never be gone
Problems are definitely infinite
It will never end until it is solved

How do you manage to solve your life? (solve your life? try something else, well it's your own)
In this cruel world we're/we are standing for? (standing for? how about "standing on/ we live in")
Do you think the word "DONE" really exists?
There is no DONE that will exist in our life

There's a lot of things never accepts this kind of word (word or world? )
Our life never ends when we die
Literally, when we die and it becomes an end of a/our journey
But still, our soul and mind, our love never be gone empty

There is always love, even our body dies
There is no point to believe in this word that it is DONE
There is no DONE that will end our life for none
You must be wrong if you believe there's a word DONE

No matter what happened, even if I die
My love is still continuously be loving
There's no rule to stop, there is no word DONE
Likewise when we I got a SCAR

 

[MisterSenpai]

I will correct you later. I'm at a convention right now.
You don't have any grammatical error on the first stanza. WOW! Nor any misspelled words. I'm proud

hahahaha
kindly visit my new improve website blog.. about poetry hope you like it. i want to impress you more lol hahaha

 

[MisterSenpai]

DONE? you can never tell when it's done
All of these things happening in our life
Each and everyday we do multiple lies
Multiple mistakes and creating unexpected signs

How do we know when it's really done?
Struggles are never be done and never be gone
Problems are definitely infinite
It will never end until it is solved

How do you manage to solve your life? (solve your life? try something else, well it's your own)
In this cruel world we're/we are standing for? (standing for? how about "standing on/ we live in")
Do you think the word "DONE" really exists?
There is no DONE that will exist in our life

There's a lot of things never accepts this kind of word (word or world? )
Our life never ends when we die
Literally, when we die and it becomes an end of a/our journey
But still, our soul and mind, our love never be gone empty

There is always love, even our body dies
There is no point to believe in this word that it is DONE
There is no DONE that will end our life for none
You must be wrong if you believe there's a word DONE

No matter what happened, even if I die
My love is still continuously be loving
There's no rule to stop, there is no word DONE
Likewise when we I got a SCAR

youre so amazing when you're correcting my mistakes.
how to be you sir?

 

[MisterSenpai]

I will correct you later. I'm at a convention right now.
You don't have any grammatical error on the first stanza. WOW! Nor any misspelled words. I'm proud

heres my official blog miss
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im not promoting it on hear. my purpose only is to share and i want a realistic opinion if my blog isnt good enough to become a BLOG.

 

[cutemedievil]

any pancakes left?

No, this is mine!

DONE? you can never tell when it's done
All of these things happening in our life
Each and everyday we do multiple lies
Multiple mistakes and creating unexpected signs

How do we know when it's really done?
Struggles are never be done and never be gone
Problems are definitely infinite
It will never end until it is solved

How do you manage to solve your life? (solve your life? try something else, well it's your own)
In this cruel world we're/we are standing for? (standing for? how about "standing on/ we live in")
Do you think the word "DONE" really exists?
There is no DONE that will exist in our life

There's a lot of things never accepts this kind of word (word or world? )
Our life never ends when we die
Literally, when we die and it becomes an end of a/our journey
But still, our soul and mind, our love never be gone empty

There is always love, even our body dies
There is no point to believe in this word that it is DONE
There is no DONE that will end our life for none
You must be wrong if you believe there's a word DONE

No matter what happened, even if I die
My love is still continuously be loving
There's no rule to stop, there is no word DONE
Likewise when we I got a SCAR

NVM. I guess you can have one! For effort

 

[cutemedievil]

heres my official blog miss
You do not have permission to view the full content of this post. Log in or register now.

im not promoting it on hear. my purpose only is to share and i want a realistic opinion if my blog isnt good enough to become a BLOG.

Don't worry, we know you enough (I guess) to know that you're not promoting
I regularly check it, once a week? I visited it like twice in total. And we're here to criticize the crap out of you lmao

 

[MisterSenpai]

Don't worry, we know you enough (I guess) to know that you're not promoting
I regularly check it, once a week? I visited it like twice in total. And we're here to criticize the crap out of you lmao

The more you slap these mistakes in my eyes,
The more I wanna prove this who am I
I will show you the most powerful motivation words beneath
With full of dedication, heart and soul beliefs

Please do.. correct me as always. Im down to earth to hear your wisdom words uppon my cheast
And Im believing with this kind of opportunity, I will never find a person like you in my life AGAIN



I posted my Poem#9 check it out.. and let IMPRESSED be with you

 

[cutemedievil]

The more you slap these mistakes in my eyes,
The more I wanna prove to you who I am.
I will show you the most powerful motivation words hidden beneath.
Full of dedication, heart and soul beliefs.

 

[Lightrash]

The more you slap these mistakes in my eyes,
The more I wanna prove to you who I am.
I will show you the most powerful motivation words hidden beneath.
Full of dedication, heart and soul beliefs.

nailed it