Closed Poem #7

[MisterSenpai]

"A Day Without Love"
(A summary of breathaking heartbreak)


I already content with my life before
Until one day, suffering come all along
Makes my life ruined like a mazed
The sadness replaced this smiling face

I try to escape like lupin the third
I'll fight this day, if there's no choice
If I ran this phase? nothing will change
I must move forward! instead of forfeit

How hard in life, become all alone?
This kind of tradegy, shaken my whole world
If Dragon balls, are really exist
Im willing to find them, just to make a wish

I remember the day, im with my family
Including my friends and my one and only
But I must say, "the world is uneasy"
Because its causing me, nightmare without sleeping

Why does heartbreak realy exist?
Why do lovers, become unhappy?
Why we can't, just love everybody?
Instead of breaking the rules of being "HAPPY?"


Originality - (UnknownMotivator)

-Ateh-
cutemedievil
baguling
madogou
Lightrash

 

[Rainbow Guise]

Ang ganda po

 

[Jmrie_]

Pwede ka na sumali sa mga talent show galing mo e

 

[MisterSenpai]

Ang ganda po

madaming salamat po

Pwede ka na sumali sa mga talent show galing mo e

hinihintay ko pa comment ni ate cutemedievil at ate baguling
para malaman ko kung ano mali ko jan hhehehe

 

[cutemedievil]

Okay I'm speechless. Though there are still some tiny errors right here & there, it's good, it's really dang good. Wow, you are indeed getting better. This one's my favorite.

 

[Lightrash]

Noticeable intro:
"I already content with my life before"
"I'm already contented with my life before"

 

[MisterSenpai]

Okay I'm speechless. Though there are still some tiny errors right here & there, it's good, it's really dang good. Wow, you are indeed getting better. This one's my favorite.

thank you so much. I appriciate it..
by the way all of your opinions, tips and advice I realy absorbing them with no doubt
Im barely serious to master this kind of language. likewise naruto say's
"There is no shortcut to become ninja!"
"This is my way of Ninja!"

those pretty cool and awesome quotes that ive ever heard.. and now i want to apply these words in real life so I can make others smile. and be inspired.

Im waiting for maam baguling
She is troublesome and the most annoying complainant wahahahaha
and I like her attitude on correcting all my wrongs.

 

[MisterSenpai]

Noticeable intro:
"I already content with my life before"
"I'm already contented with my life before"

Awesome!
and now im ready to launch this poem to my poetry blog .. thank you so much sir. thats why im tagging you here.

 

[MisterSenpai]

Okay I'm speechless. Though there are still some tiny errors right here & there, it's good, it's really dang good. Wow, you are indeed getting better. This one's my favorite.

now tell me one thing maam?
did I impress you?
I only create this for only 30-40 mins.. Honestly

 

[MisterSenpai]

Noticeable intro:
"I already content with my life before"
"I'm already contented with my life before"

sir can check this if theres no error?
so i can manage to change some options again

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thank you sir.

 

[Lightrash]

sir can check this if theres no error?
so i can manage to change some options again

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thank you sir.

How hard in life, to become/being all alone?
This kind of tradegy, shaken my whole world
If Dragon balls, are really exist
I'm willing to find them, just to make a wish

I remember the day, I'm with my family
Including my friends and my one and only
But I must say, "the world is uneasy"
Because its causing me, nightmares without sleeping

 

[MisterSenpai]

How hard in life, to become/being all alone?
This kind of tradegy, shaken my whole world
If Dragon balls, are really exist
I'm willing to find them, just to make a wish

I remember the day, I'm with my family
Including my friends and my one and only
But I must say, "the world is uneasy"
Because its causing me, nightmares without sleeping

Ill take that sir. thank you so much.

 

[cutemedievil]

I think Houdini is more appropriate and famous than Lupin III.

now tell me one thing maam?
did I impress you?
I only create this for only 30-40 mins.. Honestly

Yep I'm impressed. Read some more books, and you'd be able to master English in no time.

 

[MisterSenpai]

I think Houdini is more appropriate and famous than Lupin III.

Yep I'm impressed. Read some more books, and you'd be able to master English in no time.

I am trying to make it more appropriate and more passionate. i will update it once it done.
I honestly dont recognize whos Houdini is?
but thanks for that...

 

[cutemedievil]

I am trying to make it more appropriate and more passionate. i will update it once it done.
I honestly dont recognize whos Houdini is?
but thanks for that...

Houdini is basically a Magician/Illusionist mainly know for his escape acts.

 

[MisterSenpai]

Houdini is basically a Magician/Illusionist mainly know for his escape acts.

I rather use lupin III because of his popularity

 

[Lightrash]

I rather use lupin III because of his popularity

Read more ts, yes Lupin is famous but compared to Houdini I don't think so

 

[cutemedievil]

I rather use lupin III because of his popularity

Weabu alert. Hahaha you do you bud.

 

[MisterSenpai]

Read more ts, yes Lupin is famous but compared to Houdini I don't think so

Weabu alert. Hahaha you do you bud.

every person have their own opinions.
well. theres no wrong opinions btw ^_^

 

[madogou]

thanks for tagging me. my first tag in a post! yay!
ahem. *clears throat*

it seems to me that you are still young. that's good! keep absorbing everything.

when she said this:

I think Houdini is more appropriate and famous than Lupin III.

Yep I'm impressed. Read some more books, and you'd be able to master English in no time.

you should've consulted our common friend google and find out who Houdini is. i personally like lupin III because i grew up watching the cartoon but i'd have to side with Houdini on this one.

every person have their own opinions.
well. theres no wrong opinions btw ^_^

you are right but it doesn't hurt to be open to the idea that the other opinion is correct. see, this is where you learn.
well, it's your poem and for all you know, we are just a figment of your imagination.


you do what you want but remember this:
english is not a measure of intelligence.
hindi batayan ang pag-eenglish ng katalinuhan.

okay i'm done. i'll just be on the sidelines.