Hingi lang sana tulong mga bhie

[jiwookimna]

Hi mga bhie! Hingi lang akong tulong sa poem na ginagawa ko kung may sense ba o may kwenta. Di ko kasi talaga forte at di ako magaling sa ganitong tula tula na ito. Kadalasan ng nagagawa ko ay walang dating at walang thought, basta makagawa lang. Anu suggestion naman kung anong magandang iimprove dito? Ito pala ay tungkol sa typhoon. Salamat mga bhie!

Wind passes through time to time
Darkness was seen through the signs
Weeks has passes until nine
Dashes us from the fines

 

[Palmeras]

Wind passes through time to time
Darkness was seen through the signs
Weeks passes until nine or Weeks has passed until nine
Dashes us from the fines

 

[jiwookimna]

help naman mga bhie

 

[Icedbear]

sonnet poem po ba to? need ko rin po kaseng gumawa ng gantong poem rin po? Any ideas po?